Dollar to Donuts, it was a Dream Twist and it’s Twelve Sharp…

So, chapters 7 & 8 were pretty darn heavy. Some of you compared it to Dallas. Bobby’s not dead, he’s just in the shower

Brilliant, I didn’t think about that as I was writing the story. However, that’s a great comparison. Now you know why I didn’t develop the character Ben, further and why I didn’t delve into the marriage between Stephanie and him. She was meant to just have glimpses of a more fulfilled life. It took great pain for Stephanie to see that she was in fact a fool and it WAS her fault.

I promised a story with a message and there is a note on Chapter 9 where I talk a little about that after re-reading a good portion of Twelve Sharp. This is what I wrote:

“Twelve was probably one of her very best books if not THE best, hands down! Omigoodness, Caroline Scarzolli (shoplifter and Pleasure Treasures lady). “72 yrs. old, skin like an alligator’s, bleached blonde hair teased into a rat’s nest; wears orthopedic shoes, fishnet stockings, a tight spandex miniskirt, and a skimpy tanktop; probably smoked 3 packs a day and slept in a tanning bed (Her Grandma Mazur would get along great with this lady!).” The wall of dildos and Lula recommending the Big Boys video and buying her the Herbert Horsecock, then Caroline pulls a sawed-off from under the counter and tells them to take their shit and run and they do. Hehehe! Then they borrow Bob to apprehend this dangerous arsonist/attempted murderer times five in a park. It almost goes bad and the next thing you know, Bob is playing on his stunned body and slobbering on his crotch. Great stuff!

Here is the thing that is so wrong with the way Stephanie is written. They are seriously scared of this guy and yet Stephanie’s stun gun light won’t come on because the battery is so low. Come on! They don’t prepare at all? That’s not only totally reckless, it’s moronic stuff! All they have is Lula’s big gun and she can’t shoot the broad side of a barn even if she can get it out of her big bag before the other guy shoots first. Betcha’ dollars to donuts that if Lula or Bob had died, she would have Steph saying, “It wasn’t my fault.” That is writing her character so inept it’s ridiculous. I’m pretty sure that a guy like Ranger, would consider her mostly entertainment fodder and tail. No wonder he won’t get serious about a relationship with her.”

We are going to be getting into something new in the next chapter. A glimpse of a jealous and insecure, Ranger. Some of his secrets have been outed by a ghost. He’s probably feeling very weird and unlike himself. Comments welcome on the chapters or this fantastic book that Janet Evanovich wrote.

 

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